Hey man, you can write about whatever you want, just learn to write. And you can go wherever you want to as well, just spell the establishment's names correctly. Your terrible narrative abilities, along with your typos, and the fact that you're using this column to name drop bars and bartenders in exchange for hookups to fuel your alcoholism, I give this whole thing about 4 months tops. Take care!
1866 is actually called 1899.
Ballentines is actually called Ballantine.
This is not a good article.
1. Typos all over.
2. Reads like a play-by-play journal of a high school kid. No exposition, no narrative, no clever observation, just: we did this, then we did this, then we did this.
3. Mentioned twice that someone recognized him. No reason to write it but to let everyone know that he got recognized.
4. Don't end the article by joking about how you can't remember what happened at the end, but it had something to do with a car, right after you threw away your undeserved radio career by driving drunk.
5. Example attempt to be funny and failing: "Random black man dressed as a Man in Black that could have easily have passed for a Huxtable."
How does one pass for a Huxtable? What notable trait makes one pass for a Huxtable? Or was this some thin attempt at making an edgy race joke? Men in Black just wear suits right? so a random black man dressed as a "Man in Black" is just a black dude wearing a suit?
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